Control issues.  We all have them. You know I have them from my last post about Amazon defacing my cover.  Most are minor, but big ones cause lost friendships, divorces, misery. Let’s not even talk about current politics.

Control issues invade writing as they do life. And like life’s smaller control issues, we often don’t recognize them.

A Fatal Score early reviewer sent me a note:  “On page one, you wrote of Joe Mayfield: ‘He set down his fork and tried for an offhand smile, which he knew came off closer to a rictus.’ You should lose ‘rictus’. Not enough people know it, and it’s too early in the story to send the reader to the dictionary. Maybe use ‘grimace’.”

But … I was going for rictus.  Knew exactly the expression I wanted. Wanted reader to see the stasis, the fixed nature of the attempted polite grin.  Grimace is too mobile.  I wanted rictus!  Besides, it’s my book!

The reviewer went on, “I think it’s because of its place on the first page. You want to get them pulled in and moving and not stop to try to figure out a word.”

Which led me to reflect on a great session on mystery writing by Steve Ulfelder at the Cape Cod Writers Conference five years ago.  It was at a point in my writing when much about technique was new, and Steve gave me an Aha! moment.  He was helping another writer work fix an excruciatingly detailed description. “At best, your writing tells the reader 60-70% of the story,” he said. “The reader’s life experience, perception, and belief fills in the rest.  In that sense, the reader is your partner. That partnership takes a story from OK to Must Read.”

Aha, indeed.

Next edition will use ‘grimace.’